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NEW 02.06.08 22:09
Добрый вечер! Для экзаменов готовлю английский текст, может кто-нибудь, кто силён в английском, будет так добр и проверит его, Благодарю заранее 
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Here is the task:
Personal and Company Presentation
You are at a trade fair in Berlin representing your company. A crowd of professionals has gathered around your stand and they are expecting you to tell them about yourself, your company, including its goals, its financial record, its plans for the near future and its structure.
Right at the back you see your Company-s Controller, Ivor Buck. You know he is keeping an eye on you especially because there is a rumour that you are being considered for a senior management post.
You would like to make the most of this opportunity to impress him with your high standard of English and be able to show that you can present figures and statistics well.
Ivor Buck strongly believes in communicative, but grammatically accurate, language.
You may use diagrams as well if you wish - but keep them simple!
75% of the marks for all questions will be awarded for sensible content linked to communicative fluency. 25% will be awarded for grammatical correctness.
My solution:
International fair trade for information technology and telecommunication in Berlin.
We would be honoured if you would visit our stand at the fair. It's a great way to catch up with existing customers and introduce our new products.
It gives me great pleasure to welcome you here this morning. Let me introduce myself. My name-s Peter Albrecht, I-m sales manager at ?Compita╕ group. I would like to welcome you all here to our premises. Having already had the opportunity of getting to know you yesterday, I am delighted to have you here this evening as our guests.
I-ll try to make this as short as possible! Please stop me if anything isn-t clear.
Have you seen our latest software and tools? As I understand it, you are interested in our product and services, so I would like to take this opportunity to tell you something about it.
At first, a few words about our company. Our client is an undisputed global leader in the IT business, and invests in the best people, technology and processes to add value for its clients.
?Compita╕ is a private limited liability company and have existed since 2001 (two thousand one). We have about 2000 (two thousand) employees and 32 million dollars sales volumes in year. Our company is based in Germany, but we have sites and offices all over the world. Our main operations are in the service sector. We provide distribution system management and monitoring software. We are leading provider in this market segment.
At this trade we are need to show you our power product and our best monitoring tool ?Falco╕. There are good opportunities for this product. We-ve developed a range of interfaces for different users. We-ve been selling it successfully in Asian markets for the last 2 years. This diagram shows that the last year we have very enhanced our position with our monitoring tool ?Falco╕ and licence sales is about 30 percent gone up.
It-s on page 35 of our brochure. We would be happy also to send you some information.
Our software has been developed to the highest technical standards. We have last year powerful to invest in this product and very pleased with results. In our line of business, one must be prepared to move with the times. We have especially all prepared for test this software here and you can sniff it life. Give you question please directly to me. I would like tell you all, what I know.
Before we start with our tests, I need tell you a few words about our plants and possible cooperation with our company.
Next year we need produce more options and database exceptions. We plan more financial invest in our products and construct new bug and hotfix management section. We have already call center for our customer and will only review our processes and optimizing our cost.
We are working hard to provide a positive experience for our customers and welcome any feedback and suggestions regarding our customer service and products. Of course we also inform you about future developments or discuss applications or possible solutions, which are relevant for you. Please do not hesitate to let us know if we can be of any further help.
Finally, I-d like to thank you for coming today.
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Here is the task:
Personal and Company Presentation
You are at a trade fair in Berlin representing your company. A crowd of professionals has gathered around your stand and they are expecting you to tell them about yourself, your company, including its goals, its financial record, its plans for the near future and its structure.
Right at the back you see your Company-s Controller, Ivor Buck. You know he is keeping an eye on you especially because there is a rumour that you are being considered for a senior management post.
You would like to make the most of this opportunity to impress him with your high standard of English and be able to show that you can present figures and statistics well.
Ivor Buck strongly believes in communicative, but grammatically accurate, language.
You may use diagrams as well if you wish - but keep them simple!
75% of the marks for all questions will be awarded for sensible content linked to communicative fluency. 25% will be awarded for grammatical correctness.
My solution:
International fair trade for information technology and telecommunication in Berlin.
We would be honoured if you would visit our stand at the fair. It's a great way to catch up with existing customers and introduce our new products.
It gives me great pleasure to welcome you here this morning. Let me introduce myself. My name-s Peter Albrecht, I-m sales manager at ?Compita╕ group. I would like to welcome you all here to our premises. Having already had the opportunity of getting to know you yesterday, I am delighted to have you here this evening as our guests.
I-ll try to make this as short as possible! Please stop me if anything isn-t clear.
Have you seen our latest software and tools? As I understand it, you are interested in our product and services, so I would like to take this opportunity to tell you something about it.
At first, a few words about our company. Our client is an undisputed global leader in the IT business, and invests in the best people, technology and processes to add value for its clients.
?Compita╕ is a private limited liability company and have existed since 2001 (two thousand one). We have about 2000 (two thousand) employees and 32 million dollars sales volumes in year. Our company is based in Germany, but we have sites and offices all over the world. Our main operations are in the service sector. We provide distribution system management and monitoring software. We are leading provider in this market segment.
At this trade we are need to show you our power product and our best monitoring tool ?Falco╕. There are good opportunities for this product. We-ve developed a range of interfaces for different users. We-ve been selling it successfully in Asian markets for the last 2 years. This diagram shows that the last year we have very enhanced our position with our monitoring tool ?Falco╕ and licence sales is about 30 percent gone up.
It-s on page 35 of our brochure. We would be happy also to send you some information.
Our software has been developed to the highest technical standards. We have last year powerful to invest in this product and very pleased with results. In our line of business, one must be prepared to move with the times. We have especially all prepared for test this software here and you can sniff it life. Give you question please directly to me. I would like tell you all, what I know.
Before we start with our tests, I need tell you a few words about our plants and possible cooperation with our company.
Next year we need produce more options and database exceptions. We plan more financial invest in our products and construct new bug and hotfix management section. We have already call center for our customer and will only review our processes and optimizing our cost.
We are working hard to provide a positive experience for our customers and welcome any feedback and suggestions regarding our customer service and products. Of course we also inform you about future developments or discuss applications or possible solutions, which are relevant for you. Please do not hesitate to let us know if we can be of any further help.
Finally, I-d like to thank you for coming today.
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NEW 03.06.08 16:31
в ответ pegapro 02.06.08 22:09
Я Вам, конечно, ошибки поправить могу, но смысл задания не в этом, это только 25%. От Вас хотят красивой и разнообразной речи, а Вы пишите простыми убогими предложениями, т.е. это не то, что я Вас критикую или обидеть хочу, это тот критерий, по которому Вас будут оценивать.
Я бы Вам посоветовала найти презентацию на английском, сделанную американцами или англичанами, и под себя ее переделать. Тогда структуры предложений будут более разнообразными и стилистических ошибок будет меньше. Например, нельзя в официальной презентации сказать It's a great way to catch up with existing customers. Или sites and offices all over the world должны быть branches, subsidiaries or representative offices, я уж не знаю, что из этого Вы имеете ввиду.
sales is about 30 percent gone up это, я так понимаю, sales increase of 30 per. cent.
We have last year powerful to invest in this product - вот это я не поняла вообще.
Вместо Give you question please directly to me есть устоявшаяся фраза, используемая в деловой корреспонденции: Should you have any further questions, pls do not hesitate to contact [..].
Короче, по-честному, переписывать надо все целиком.
Я бы Вам посоветовала найти презентацию на английском, сделанную американцами или англичанами, и под себя ее переделать. Тогда структуры предложений будут более разнообразными и стилистических ошибок будет меньше. Например, нельзя в официальной презентации сказать It's a great way to catch up with existing customers. Или sites and offices all over the world должны быть branches, subsidiaries or representative offices, я уж не знаю, что из этого Вы имеете ввиду.
sales is about 30 percent gone up это, я так понимаю, sales increase of 30 per. cent.
We have last year powerful to invest in this product - вот это я не поняла вообще.
Вместо Give you question please directly to me есть устоявшаяся фраза, используемая в деловой корреспонденции: Should you have any further questions, pls do not hesitate to contact [..].
Короче, по-честному, переписывать надо все целиком.
NEW 03.06.08 18:52
Ну, не надо умничать. Тем более, что это не согласование времен, а сослагательное наклонение (conjunctive mood). Человек попросил о помощи. Если бы у него не было проблем с языком, он бы сюда не обратился. Можете помочь - помогите, думаю, автор будет благодарен. А так в чем смысл Вашего сообщения?
NEW 03.06.08 20:16
в ответ pegapro 03.06.08 19:38
смотря как вам оценки ставят, а так не так все уж и плохо, бывает много хуже. будете готовиться, концентрируйте внимание на критерии оценки - судя по заданию - содержательная часть и лексикон. за идеальную грамматику 25% баллов, т.е. важно, но содержание важнее.
NEW 03.06.08 22:21
в ответ ogk 03.06.08 20:16
Спасибо за ответ,
я собрал вторую версию презентации.
Буду признателен за критику и за совет, какая версия всё таки лучше, или-же "бог любит троицу!" :)
Благодарю заранее
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about yourself
Ladies and Gentlemen, it▓s a pleasure for me to welcome you all at information technology and communications in Berlin.
I would like to introduce myself. I▓m Peter Albrecht and I work for SystemLog as marketing manager.
your company
With annual revenue of $5 billion, SystemLog is a global leader in software and processing solutions for financial services, higher education and the public sector. SystemLog also helps information-dependent enterprises of all types to ensure the continuity of their business. SystemLog serves more than 25,000 customers in more than 50 countries, including the world's 50 largest financial services companies.
Headquartered in Stuttgart, Germany, SystemLog employs over 17,900 people in more than 400 offices in 30 countries.
SystemLog is comprised of four businesses - Availability Services, Financial Systems, Higher Education and Public Sector - that provide IT services and infrastructure, and software and processing solutions.
its structure
SystemLog offers expertise in:
∙ identifying availability requirements
∙ defining business continuity strategies
∙ developing specialized software for data protection and related needs
SystemLog offers solutions for firms specializing in:
∙ Alternative Investments
∙ Banking
∙ Benefit Administration
∙ Brokerage & Clearance
including its goals
We seek to become the provider of choice for all of our customers' office technology needs by offering a full range of products and superior customer service. Our strategic objectives are 1) to be the leading and most profitable provider of office technology solutions to customers in the middle market and 2) to continue to grow profitably through internal expansion and by acquiring additional businesses. We enter new geographic markets by acquiring additional core companies.
its financial record
SystemLog thus achieved the best result in the company´s history. Once again, the key driver behind this record result was the strong growth in SystemLog▓s core segment of financial services, which accounts for two thirds of the company´s POA (Price On Application) and net profit. The derivatives segment performed particularly well and even surpassed the company´s own expectations.
EUR mill. 2007 2006 Change
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Operating income 20.736 12.993 + 59.59%
Operating expenses 3.646 3.109 + 17.27%
Operating result 16.958 9.744 + 74.04%
its plans for the near future
As a company plans its future, it will have to take into account the above pressures. Companies will be faced with choosing between equally unpleasant options: turning down work because they are short-handed, or taking on work with the risk of failing on delivery. Since production of new engineers takes 10 years≈five years of college and five years before sitting for the professional engineer exam≈even legislative help on the education side will not help this shortage.
end
I take this opportunity to thank all the members on the board for their unstinted support and guidance and my deepest appreciation goes to all the employees of the Company for their dedication and valuable contribution in fulfilling the objectives of the Company besides facing and surmounting the ever changing business challenges, resulting in the all round growth and progress of our company. Last but not the least, I would like to extend my special thanks to all our shareholders, customers, suppliers, bankers for their whole hearted support and I am confident that SystemLog would grow from strength to strength in the years to come.
Thank you
я собрал вторую версию презентации.
Буду признателен за критику и за совет, какая версия всё таки лучше, или-же "бог любит троицу!" :)
Благодарю заранее
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about yourself
Ladies and Gentlemen, it▓s a pleasure for me to welcome you all at information technology and communications in Berlin.
I would like to introduce myself. I▓m Peter Albrecht and I work for SystemLog as marketing manager.
your company
With annual revenue of $5 billion, SystemLog is a global leader in software and processing solutions for financial services, higher education and the public sector. SystemLog also helps information-dependent enterprises of all types to ensure the continuity of their business. SystemLog serves more than 25,000 customers in more than 50 countries, including the world's 50 largest financial services companies.
Headquartered in Stuttgart, Germany, SystemLog employs over 17,900 people in more than 400 offices in 30 countries.
SystemLog is comprised of four businesses - Availability Services, Financial Systems, Higher Education and Public Sector - that provide IT services and infrastructure, and software and processing solutions.
its structure
SystemLog offers expertise in:
∙ identifying availability requirements
∙ defining business continuity strategies
∙ developing specialized software for data protection and related needs
SystemLog offers solutions for firms specializing in:
∙ Alternative Investments
∙ Banking
∙ Benefit Administration
∙ Brokerage & Clearance
including its goals
We seek to become the provider of choice for all of our customers' office technology needs by offering a full range of products and superior customer service. Our strategic objectives are 1) to be the leading and most profitable provider of office technology solutions to customers in the middle market and 2) to continue to grow profitably through internal expansion and by acquiring additional businesses. We enter new geographic markets by acquiring additional core companies.
its financial record
SystemLog thus achieved the best result in the company´s history. Once again, the key driver behind this record result was the strong growth in SystemLog▓s core segment of financial services, which accounts for two thirds of the company´s POA (Price On Application) and net profit. The derivatives segment performed particularly well and even surpassed the company´s own expectations.
EUR mill. 2007 2006 Change
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Operating income 20.736 12.993 + 59.59%
Operating expenses 3.646 3.109 + 17.27%
Operating result 16.958 9.744 + 74.04%
its plans for the near future
As a company plans its future, it will have to take into account the above pressures. Companies will be faced with choosing between equally unpleasant options: turning down work because they are short-handed, or taking on work with the risk of failing on delivery. Since production of new engineers takes 10 years≈five years of college and five years before sitting for the professional engineer exam≈even legislative help on the education side will not help this shortage.
end
I take this opportunity to thank all the members on the board for their unstinted support and guidance and my deepest appreciation goes to all the employees of the Company for their dedication and valuable contribution in fulfilling the objectives of the Company besides facing and surmounting the ever changing business challenges, resulting in the all round growth and progress of our company. Last but not the least, I would like to extend my special thanks to all our shareholders, customers, suppliers, bankers for their whole hearted support and I am confident that SystemLog would grow from strength to strength in the years to come.
Thank you
NEW 04.06.08 16:42
в ответ pegapro 03.06.08 22:21
С т.з. английского, намного лучше. Теперь надо разобраться с содержанием, потому что если у вас фирма ориентируется банки, ВУЗы и публичный сектор, то про это и надо писать, а Ваши продукты скорее для хэдж фондов да бирж каких-нибудь.
Долго думала над identifying availability requirements, звучит хорошо, но, блин, что это такое может в реальной жизни быть? Еще долго думала вот над этим: helps information-dependent enterprises of all types to ensure the continuity of their business.
Кстати, Price On Application это совсем не то, что Вы думаете. Это способ предоставления информации, когда ее нет в открытом доступе, но можно получить по запросу. 2/3 от этого посчитать чисто физически невозможно
Короче, перечитайте все еще раз и сделайте так, чтоб Вам самому было все понятно, что там написано. А потом уже можно будет ошибки править.
Долго думала над identifying availability requirements, звучит хорошо, но, блин, что это такое может в реальной жизни быть? Еще долго думала вот над этим: helps information-dependent enterprises of all types to ensure the continuity of their business.
Кстати, Price On Application это совсем не то, что Вы думаете. Это способ предоставления информации, когда ее нет в открытом доступе, но можно получить по запросу. 2/3 от этого посчитать чисто физически невозможно
Короче, перечитайте все еще раз и сделайте так, чтоб Вам самому было все понятно, что там написано. А потом уже можно будет ошибки править.
NEW 04.06.08 19:30
в ответ pegapro 03.06.08 22:21
нашла аббревиатуру POA - profit on ordinary activities, не сразу попалась
http://www.acronymattic.com/results.aspx?q=POA
http://www.acronymattic.com/results.aspx?q=POA
NEW 04.06.08 19:34
в ответ pegapro 03.06.08 22:21
английский лучше, но информация очень тяжело идет, рекламные лозунги выпадают стилистически. статистику не описали... из вашего задания ее надо включать обязательно.
попробуйте еще раз! что-нибудь промежуточное, но близкое лично вам по направлению, будет легче смысл контролировать.
попробуйте еще раз! что-нибудь промежуточное, но близкое лично вам по направлению, будет легче смысл контролировать.
NEW 04.06.08 20:40
в ответ ogk 04.06.08 19:34
Спасибо огромное
мне в субботу надо уже экзамен писать и новую версию я, к сожалению, уже не осилю, мне ведь её ещё наизусть заучить надо.
Я немного поправил всё что было посоветованно:
- оставил теперь только сегмент financial systems
- поправил POA - спасибо большое за подсказку
Статистику я даже не знаю какую-бы добавить, текст уже состоит из более чем 600 слов. Чего нибудь неграмотного насочинять не хотелось бы.
вот поправленная версия (если ещё что-то можно косметически поправить, буду рад советам)
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<about yourself>
Ladies and Gentlemen, it-s my pleasure to welcome you all at information technology and communications fair in Berlin.
I would like to introduce myself and my company.
If you require further information, please do not hesitate to contact me.
I-m Peter Albrecht and I work for SystemLog as marketing manager.
<your company>
With annual revenue of $2 billion, SystemLog is a global leader in software and processing solutions for financial services, higher education and the public sector. SystemLog also helps information-dependent enterprises of all types to ensure the continuity of their business. SystemLog serves more than 15,000 customers in more than 30 countries, including the world's 30 largest financial services companies.
Headquartered in Stuttgart, Germany, SystemLog employs over 11,900 people in more than 200 offices in 20 countries.
SystemLog is comprised of Financial Systems businesses - that provide IT services and infrastructure, and software and processing solutions.
<its structure>
SystemLog Financial Systems provides mission-critical software and IT services to institutions in virtually every segment of the financial services industry. These solutions meet a multitude of needs, but support a common aim: to help drive our customers' unique business strategies?whether that means increasing efficiency, improving customer service, complying with regulations, or capturing growth opportunities through innovation. SystemLog offers solutions for firms specializing in:
∙ Alternative Investments
∙ Banking
∙ Benefit Administration
∙ Brokerage & Clearance
∙ Capital Markets & Investment Banking
∙ Energy Trading & Risk Management
∙ Institutional Asset Management
∙ Insurance
∙ Trading
∙ Treasury Management
∙ Wealth Management
SystemLog systems support the accounting and management of more than $15 trillion in invested assets and process more than 3 million trades each day.
<including its goals>
We seek to become the provider of choice for all of our customers' office technology needs by offering a full range of products and superior customer service. Our strategic objectives are 1) to be the leading and most profitable provider of office technology solutions to customers in the middle market and 2) to continue to grow profitably through internal expansion and by acquiring additional businesses. We enter new geographic markets by acquiring additional core companies.
<its financial record> present figures and statistics
SystemLog thus achieved the best result in the company-s history. Once again, the key driver behind this record result was the strong growth in SystemLog-s core segment of financial systems, which accounts for two thirds of the company-s POA (Profit on Ordinary Activities) and net profit. The derivatives segment performed particularly well and even surpassed the company-s own expectations.
EUR mill. 2007 2006 Change
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Operating income 200.736 120.993 + 59.59%
Operating expenses 30.646 30.109 + 17.27%
Operating result 160.958 90.744 + 74.04%
<its plans for the near future>
As a company plans its future, it will have to take into account the above pressures. Companies will be faced with choosing between equally unpleasant options: turning down work because they are short-handed, or taking on work with the risk of failing on delivery. Since production of new engineers takes 10 years?five years of college and five years before sitting for the professional engineer exam?even legislative help on the education side will not help this shortage.
<end>
I take this opportunity to thank all the members on the board for their untainted support and guidance and my deepest appreciation goes to all the employees of the Company for their dedication and valuable contribution in fulfilling the objectives of the Company besides facing and surmounting the ever changing business challenges, resulting in the all round growth and progress of our company. Last but not the least, I would like to extend my special thanks to all our shareholders, customers, suppliers, bankers for their whole hearted support and I am confident that SystemLog would grow from strength to strength in the years to come.
Thank you
мне в субботу надо уже экзамен писать и новую версию я, к сожалению, уже не осилю, мне ведь её ещё наизусть заучить надо.
Я немного поправил всё что было посоветованно:
- оставил теперь только сегмент financial systems
- поправил POA - спасибо большое за подсказку
Статистику я даже не знаю какую-бы добавить, текст уже состоит из более чем 600 слов. Чего нибудь неграмотного насочинять не хотелось бы.
вот поправленная версия (если ещё что-то можно косметически поправить, буду рад советам)
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<about yourself>
Ladies and Gentlemen, it-s my pleasure to welcome you all at information technology and communications fair in Berlin.
I would like to introduce myself and my company.
If you require further information, please do not hesitate to contact me.
I-m Peter Albrecht and I work for SystemLog as marketing manager.
<your company>
With annual revenue of $2 billion, SystemLog is a global leader in software and processing solutions for financial services, higher education and the public sector. SystemLog also helps information-dependent enterprises of all types to ensure the continuity of their business. SystemLog serves more than 15,000 customers in more than 30 countries, including the world's 30 largest financial services companies.
Headquartered in Stuttgart, Germany, SystemLog employs over 11,900 people in more than 200 offices in 20 countries.
SystemLog is comprised of Financial Systems businesses - that provide IT services and infrastructure, and software and processing solutions.
<its structure>
SystemLog Financial Systems provides mission-critical software and IT services to institutions in virtually every segment of the financial services industry. These solutions meet a multitude of needs, but support a common aim: to help drive our customers' unique business strategies?whether that means increasing efficiency, improving customer service, complying with regulations, or capturing growth opportunities through innovation. SystemLog offers solutions for firms specializing in:
∙ Alternative Investments
∙ Banking
∙ Benefit Administration
∙ Brokerage & Clearance
∙ Capital Markets & Investment Banking
∙ Energy Trading & Risk Management
∙ Institutional Asset Management
∙ Insurance
∙ Trading
∙ Treasury Management
∙ Wealth Management
SystemLog systems support the accounting and management of more than $15 trillion in invested assets and process more than 3 million trades each day.
<including its goals>
We seek to become the provider of choice for all of our customers' office technology needs by offering a full range of products and superior customer service. Our strategic objectives are 1) to be the leading and most profitable provider of office technology solutions to customers in the middle market and 2) to continue to grow profitably through internal expansion and by acquiring additional businesses. We enter new geographic markets by acquiring additional core companies.
<its financial record> present figures and statistics
SystemLog thus achieved the best result in the company-s history. Once again, the key driver behind this record result was the strong growth in SystemLog-s core segment of financial systems, which accounts for two thirds of the company-s POA (Profit on Ordinary Activities) and net profit. The derivatives segment performed particularly well and even surpassed the company-s own expectations.
EUR mill. 2007 2006 Change
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Operating income 200.736 120.993 + 59.59%
Operating expenses 30.646 30.109 + 17.27%
Operating result 160.958 90.744 + 74.04%
<its plans for the near future>
As a company plans its future, it will have to take into account the above pressures. Companies will be faced with choosing between equally unpleasant options: turning down work because they are short-handed, or taking on work with the risk of failing on delivery. Since production of new engineers takes 10 years?five years of college and five years before sitting for the professional engineer exam?even legislative help on the education side will not help this shortage.
<end>
I take this opportunity to thank all the members on the board for their untainted support and guidance and my deepest appreciation goes to all the employees of the Company for their dedication and valuable contribution in fulfilling the objectives of the Company besides facing and surmounting the ever changing business challenges, resulting in the all round growth and progress of our company. Last but not the least, I would like to extend my special thanks to all our shareholders, customers, suppliers, bankers for their whole hearted support and I am confident that SystemLog would grow from strength to strength in the years to come.
Thank you
NEW 04.06.08 22:16
в ответ pegapro 04.06.08 20:40
вместо ....<its financial record> present figures and statistics
SystemLog thus achieved the best result in the company-s history. Once again, the key driver behind this record result was the strong growth in SystemLog-s core segment of financial systems, which accounts for two thirds of the company-s POA (Profit on Ordinary Activities) and net profit. The derivatives segment performed particularly well and even surpassed the company-s own expectations.
EUR mill. 2007 2006 Change
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Operating income 200.736 120.993 + 59.59%
Operating expenses 30.646 30.109 + 17.27%
Operating result 160.958 90.744 + 74.04%
пишем In 2007 Systemlog achieved the best result in company's history with operating income of round 200 Thousand (eur, gbp?), an increase of 59,59% over the previous year. Even more noteworthy is the fact that operating expenses increased only by 17,27%, a tribute to sound management policies. Operating result in 2007 jumped 74,04% in comparison to 2006, to 161 thousand (eur, gbp?). Once again in 2007, the key driver behind this record result was the strong growth in SystemLog-s core segment of financial systems, which accounts for two thirds of the company-s POA (Profit on Ordinary Activities) and net profit. The derivatives segment performed particularly well and even surpassed the company-s own expectations.
эти два абзаца ниже не надо...
As a company plans its future, it will have to take into account the above pressures. Companies will be faced with choosing between equally unpleasant options: turning down work because they are short-handed, or taking on work with the risk of failing on delivery. Since production of new engineers takes 10 years?five years of college and five years before sitting for the professional engineer exam?even legislative help on the education side will not help this shortage.
I take this opportunity to thank all the members on the board for their untainted support and guidance and my deepest appreciation goes to all the employees of the Company for their dedication and valuable contribution in fulfilling the objectives of the Company besides facing and surmounting the ever changing business challenges, resulting in the all round growth and progress of our company. Last but not the least, I would like to extend my special thanks to all our shareholders, customers, suppliers, bankers for their whole hearted support and I am confident that SystemLog would grow from strength to strength in the years to come.
Thank you
вместо этого завершение надо, вроде в первом варинате было ничего... сейчас к сожалению больше помочь не могу, поздновато
SystemLog thus achieved the best result in the company-s history. Once again, the key driver behind this record result was the strong growth in SystemLog-s core segment of financial systems, which accounts for two thirds of the company-s POA (Profit on Ordinary Activities) and net profit. The derivatives segment performed particularly well and even surpassed the company-s own expectations.
EUR mill. 2007 2006 Change
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Operating income 200.736 120.993 + 59.59%
Operating expenses 30.646 30.109 + 17.27%
Operating result 160.958 90.744 + 74.04%
пишем In 2007 Systemlog achieved the best result in company's history with operating income of round 200 Thousand (eur, gbp?), an increase of 59,59% over the previous year. Even more noteworthy is the fact that operating expenses increased only by 17,27%, a tribute to sound management policies. Operating result in 2007 jumped 74,04% in comparison to 2006, to 161 thousand (eur, gbp?). Once again in 2007, the key driver behind this record result was the strong growth in SystemLog-s core segment of financial systems, which accounts for two thirds of the company-s POA (Profit on Ordinary Activities) and net profit. The derivatives segment performed particularly well and even surpassed the company-s own expectations.
эти два абзаца ниже не надо...
As a company plans its future, it will have to take into account the above pressures. Companies will be faced with choosing between equally unpleasant options: turning down work because they are short-handed, or taking on work with the risk of failing on delivery. Since production of new engineers takes 10 years?five years of college and five years before sitting for the professional engineer exam?even legislative help on the education side will not help this shortage.
I take this opportunity to thank all the members on the board for their untainted support and guidance and my deepest appreciation goes to all the employees of the Company for their dedication and valuable contribution in fulfilling the objectives of the Company besides facing and surmounting the ever changing business challenges, resulting in the all round growth and progress of our company. Last but not the least, I would like to extend my special thanks to all our shareholders, customers, suppliers, bankers for their whole hearted support and I am confident that SystemLog would grow from strength to strength in the years to come.
Thank you
вместо этого завершение надо, вроде в первом варинате было ничего... сейчас к сожалению больше помочь не могу, поздновато
NEW 05.06.08 14:04
в ответ ogk 04.06.08 22:16
Ох, спасибо большое за помощь!
Я изменил, что Вы предложили и подготовил новый конец.
Посмотрите пожалуйста, так нормально?
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As we have seen, I think it would be fair to say our company perform well in a highly competitive environment by delivering the innovative telecommunications services that our customers need, while making prudent investments to deliver continued value for our stockholders.
You can hold more information from our brochure or in internet on www.systemlog.com.
Finally, I-d like to thank you for coming today.
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Я изменил, что Вы предложили и подготовил новый конец.
Посмотрите пожалуйста, так нормально?
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...
<диаграмма с Sales analysis>
As we have seen, I think it would be fair to say our company perform well in a highly competitive environment by delivering the innovative telecommunications services that our customers need, while making prudent investments to deliver continued value for our stockholders.
You can hold more information from our brochure or in internet on www.systemlog.com.
Finally, I-d like to thank you for coming today.
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NEW 05.06.08 20:50
в ответ pegapro 05.06.08 14:04
чуть поправлю
IN CONCLUSION, I think it would be fair to say (THAT) our company performS well in a highly competitive environment by delivering the innovative telecommunications services that our customers need, while making prudent investments to deliver continued value for our stockholders.
FOR MORE INFORMATION PLEASE SEE our brochure or OUR WEBSITE www.systemlog.com. THANK YOU ALL FOR COMING HERE TODAY. IF YOU HAVE QUESTIONS, I WOULD BE HAPPY TO ANSWER THEM OR MAKE AN APPROPRIATE REFERRAL. THANK YOU AGAIN FOR YOUR INTEREST AND AM LOOKING FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU AGAIN AND WORKING WITH YOU:
IN CONCLUSION, I think it would be fair to say (THAT) our company performS well in a highly competitive environment by delivering the innovative telecommunications services that our customers need, while making prudent investments to deliver continued value for our stockholders.
FOR MORE INFORMATION PLEASE SEE our brochure or OUR WEBSITE www.systemlog.com. THANK YOU ALL FOR COMING HERE TODAY. IF YOU HAVE QUESTIONS, I WOULD BE HAPPY TO ANSWER THEM OR MAKE AN APPROPRIATE REFERRAL. THANK YOU AGAIN FOR YOUR INTEREST AND AM LOOKING FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU AGAIN AND WORKING WITH YOU: